12/06/03 17:22:41.83 xahRBUF00
[添削後]
We, the Iroha Group, have been holding "A General Election of Popular Game Characters" since 20 May to decide the most popular character
among mobile game players. Mobile phone users are welcome to vote their most favorite one chosen from the group of characters appearing
in the games provided as applications for fixed monthly fees, designed for the feature phones and Android Smartphones.
[評価]
前回と同じ20点満点と考えると、18点以上。違和感があるのは最初の方だけで、後半に関しては添削者もうまい英訳が思いつかない。もう少しすっきりとした
表現ができると気分が良いのだろうが、添削者の限界を感じるところである。