08/10/24 02:48:52
Dear Dan,
Nice to hear from you. I'm doing well.
You know, Japan is very smaller and has more people than Australia.
So, not many people rely on cars. Instead, we rely on trains or bikes.
Now, global warming is the world wide problem. Introducing eco-friendly vehicles will be
popular to solve it.
Your sister got driver's license? It is pretty nice for your sister to have got driver's license.
No matter when we got it, driving makes not only our range of acticity but also our idea wide only if we take
responsibility for our driving.
Regards,
Nao
(92words)
これはどうでしょうか？自分で気づいてる減点されそうなところは
very smaller→much smaller
ｎot many people rely on→people doesn't entirely rely on
妹の免許取得のくだりが冗長なこと
最後の文になんか違和感感じること
のあたりです。
英作除いた自己採点は６２点で、２次対策しようかどうか迷ってます。