08/06/28 23:55:39
>>836
Just trying to give you some constructive critiscm
90 years should be 90th.
he had been should be he has been. (been is already past tense)
there too many commas in "...these days, but now, in Zimbabwe, the neighboring country, .."
Remember, each time there's a comma, you have to pause while speaking. It would sound weird pausing 4 times during that sentence.
You can use "...these days, but now in the neighboring country Zimbabwe, ..."
are in crisis should be is in crisis. (are is plural, you're only talking about one country)
You don't need the word 'the' before President Mugabe.